You're welcome! I'm glad to have been of service. :3

Hi there! Welcome to WCRPG.

I saw your advanced bio on the "0 Replies" thread; I recommend posting it here instead, though, because that's where it'll be seen and (eventually) approved.

Anyway, I read through the rest of the bio, and it looks really good so far. If you're interested, I've written some feedback:

Her appearance description seems to linger quite a bit on how beautiful and mysterious she is, which (to me, at least) gives an impression of a Mary Sue. How big is she? Does she have any scars or other permanent wounds? What kind of frame/build does she have? Just a few minor things that I, personally, like to include in an appearance description; obviously, this isn't necessary.

The personality section confuses me a bit. It seems to talk more about how Willowpaw liked hearing stories than what she's like. (Yes, I understand that she's mysterious and might not have a personality that's obvious at a first glance.) From what I get, however, she's introverted, ambitious, curious, independent, and determined.

Her history's too short. The first sentence describes her personality more than her past, and the second is a run-on with no clear end. Who were her parents/siblings? Was she born in DarkClan? Anything notable happen during her kithood? Why doesn't she have a mentor? Just answering these questions should give a nice starting point.

The roleplay sample is very interesting; I don't see many people writing from the POV of the prey. There's a couple errors in punctuation but other than that it's very well-written... though it reads more like a prologue to a story than it does a roleplay post. As a roleplayer, the only thing I get from this is that a cat just killed a rabbit and it's night-time. The more you can give your fellow roleplayers to build on, the better.

(And as a small note, you're free to roleplay in any format you want, though third-person is standard.)

Finally, don't forget paragraph breaks. Nearly everything is written as one large paragraph, which is straining on the eyes; in personality, there could be a new paragraph for each trait (or cluster of traits, depending on how many there are) to describe it; in history, a new paragraph should be made for each major point in her life, etc. (That's just the way I do it, though even if you don't use that exact format, paragraph breaks would be nice.)

Thanks for reading this super-long comment, and I'm sorry if I was being harsh in my feedback. :C I do tend to take things overboard when critiquing writing, so please tell me if I sounded mean at any point.

Have fun roleplaying!